Every now and again, it pays to take a look in the mirror and laugh at yourself. The da Bestiary by *Windy999 is how we as an online society can do just that. dA Bestiary No 6 is one in a series of caricatures of ourselves. We'll be featuring one of them a day for the first sixteen in the series. (
Cool. Fortunately, I haven't met any of these yet. *looks around warily*
Since I don't yet know how you feel about having your grammar picked apart, I'll limit myself to one correction: the difference between "that" and "which." Basically, a clause that begins with "which" is generally set apart by a comma, while one that begins with "that" is not. So, the first sentence should either be
"Beware this creature, which lurks throughout the dAsphere."
"Beware this creature that lurks throughout the dAsphere."
If you want corrections on other niggling things, let me know. And I'm sorry if I'm coming off as overly negative... It's just that I really do think these bestiary entries are awesome, and I want to help you get them as polished as possible.
Oh, and if I haven't said so already, the fake Latin names are great. Makes me think of the old Coyote and Roadrunner cartoons.